Thursday, 16 October 2008

of sighs and smiles

for days now
pensive i've been.

how do you respond to a sigh?
do you sigh in return
or do you smile
sunshine bright
knowing
the sigh will
dis
appear.

does a smile
travel
( i know, laughter does)
through cellular towers
dancing on cables
soaking
the morning sun?

can a morningfreshsunbright
mobile smile
fill up a moment
of solitude
nurtured
in cigarette smoke?

can it tear apart
the blanket
of silence
with the
vivacity of laughter?

we shall meet
again
dear friend
and fill our cups
with
laughter.

deep inside me
forgotten roots
stir.
in our tongue
we never
say
going.
we
say
coming.



2 comments:

  1. Comment i got from Saikatda, makes me happy

    "read the poem. i really like your rhyme scheme, and the physicality of the arrangment of the lines. there is something endearingly transient about them. the second stanza is the most powerful thematically, the idea of reciprocity, and the third stanza is lovely too, and the way you weave in the metaphor of the mobile phone. i think you become a tad self-indulgent when you get to your comfort tropes, cigarettes and cups (of coffee?), and the leanness of the emotion sags a bit. not crazy about the inversion in the first line...sounds a bit deliberately archaic. but your greatest strength is in the mixing of metaphors, of the senses, which probably comes out best in the very title of your blog - amazing! at the risk of sounding academic, this is what the metaphysical poets excelled. i think you'll like donne if you don't already! "

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  2. i've re-read this several times now... and i think these are the most poignant lines anyone's ever written for me...

    the one minor blip- the first two lines... the poem reads much better without them... try it...

    :)

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